Enjoy the following from Mr. Farnes!
My 5th graders and I had a really great writing assignment today. After discussing the 3 types of writing styles (opinion, informative, narrative) we voted which style we wanted to try to write. Of course they all voted for narrative. So we went around the room with each of the students adding one sentence to the story. We all had a blast. After our first draft we went back and revised. While revising we discussed whether our story had all the essential elements of a good story like conflict, rising action, and a solution. So we made more tweaks. Below is the final version. I think it actually came out pretty good for being a piece of writing made up on the spot and then revised. Having a blast with these kiddos. [student names have been changed--yes, all the names in the story aside from Jimbob and Bob were kids in the class trying to insert themselves into the story]
Jimbob’s Annoying Adventure
Once upon a time, Jimbob was in Mr. Farnes’ class. He was annoying because he was crazy. While everyone else was at recess, Jimbob stole a ball and accidentally broke the fence with the ball. Jimbob got in really big trouble.
Meanwhile, Janet and Jacinda came along. They, along with the rest of the class, were Mr. Farnes’ favorite students of them all. Janet and Jacinda got Jimbob in trouble but blamed someone else. Jimbob got in so much trouble that one of the kids decided to teach him a lesson. “Somehow” “someone” pushed him down a hole. In the hole, there was a giant dragon named Bob with giant teeth that was about to bite his head off. Then Rambo came in and killed Bob but Rambo was sad because he realized Bob was his pet dragon.
Actually Stacy, Miranda, and Jessica were Mr. Farnes’ favorites, along with the rest of the class, because they helped Jimbob get out of the hole.
At lunchtime, Jimbob ate a sandwich that was made out of potatoes. So he went to the gym to workout and he got all sweaty. After going to the gym, he went to the library and annoyed everyone with his stench. At the library, he saw Shrep the Ogre and said “Hello!” But Shrep punched him in the face because he was so stinky and because he got out of the hole he pushed him in for Janet and Jacinda blaming him. So Jimbob ran off crying and was sad the rest of his life. The end.